18 May paper revision
Mingjun Yan English1110: Draft of Primary Source Analysis 1/29/2018
Please simply revise this paper based on the instructor feedback AND the detailed revision requirement!
The primary source is Gideon’s Kitchen. Please watch it before revising this paper.
Instructor feedback of my own draft: Mingjun Yan, this is a good start. You note how the sketch uses misdirection and irony, but you could talk more about parody still. This sketch parodies reality TV––how sensational it is, how it relies on these cheap sort of cliff hangers. It takes these conventions and makes them absurd, which in turn makes us laugh at the conventions. For writing about parody, look at how it mimics its source. Think about Hell’s Kitchen and Gordon Ramsey’s persona, and look at how this sketch plays around with the show’s set up. Great work––keep writing!
Lauren Cook (cook.1112) , Feb 8 at 5:30pm
Your primary source is not too short. You can change it if you are uncomfortable with it, but Key and Peele sketches work well.
Detailed revision requirements:
At this point, you have completed the PSA rough draft, spending a lot of time making the implicit explicit, and delving into the world of your primary source. Like in the rough draft, this paper will analyze, and as a result will address real life issues. However, this paper is not about real life issues. It is about a work of comedy that addresses a larger social issue. So, for example, your paper might be about a Louis CK joke about gender. You would want to write about the cultural assumptions about gender at play, but this would all be addressed via your primary source––”CK’s joke about men at a bar draws on stereotypes about male hyper sexuality…” What you do NOT want to do: “CK’s joke about men at a bar is true because men regard sex like this…”
It’s important to think about how cultural assumptions or stereotypes work in your source, rather than merely list different stereotypes that arise. Most of us can recognize various stereotypes in comedy; the bigger question is how they are being employed––are they challenging the stereotype? Are they disparaging a group of people by using the stereotype?
One thing that might be a bit painful is that you are expected to be critical of the source, which means you may need to––gasp––talk about how your favorite comedian/show might be flawed. This is a breakthrough moment, though. Your perspective is not the only, nor the primary, perspective. Your favorite comedian’s perspective is not the only, nor the primary, perspective. By stepping back and trying on multiple perspectives, you will have a more holistic understanding of how your source works. You won’t hurt yourself by understanding other people and their experiences.
Expectations of the PSA:
· 600-900 words, properly formatted, acceptable file format
· Demonstrates expertise with the primary source by moving beyond the explicit
· Addresses the purpose of the primary source, and how rhetoric works toward this end
· Is focused and coherent. Your PSA will deal with a lot of ideas, and sometimes things don’t feel like they “flow”––this is expected at this point. What we mean by focused and coherent is: are you connecting your claims with evidence (specific examples from the source)? Are you articulating your ideas clearly?
· USES OBSERVATION, INTERPRETATION, CLAIM
· At the close of your analysis, end with one or two analytical “research questions” (questions that arise from observations about the source) that you will use to begin thinking more deeply about your topic and to help you find materials for the upcoming Annotated Bibliography and Secondary Source Integration. We will go over how to develop a research question in class to aid you with this last portion of the assignment.
Original draft:
Having seen Key and Peele’s Black Ice, I found it super enjoyable for me to watch their sketches. This weekend I came across another fantastic piece of work created by Key and Peele called Gideon’s Kitchen. In Gideon’s Kitchen, a chief makes compliments of his apprentice’s dish the same time as belittling it through artful arrangements of words.
At the beginning, the apprentice acted by Peele served a dish of cake to the chief acted by Key, with his nervous face and gingerly action. After Key tried the cake he said: “unbelievable” which is a neutral word and which makes me, as audience, look forward to what he is going to say. “I had a huge problem with this dish,” said the chief together with a suddenly intensified background music and Peele’s popped eyes. “that you had to make it for me sooner.” The chief continuous, with a lively music and Peele’s relieved face and words. However, the chief added, “because if you had done that I could know how good you are at cooking food that’s bad.” The thunder-like music comes back again. “I said bad, I mean Michael Jackson Bad”, the chief said, followed with Peele’s uncertainly happy face. This is the first punchline to me which made me laugh as well as the next one: “You know he looks really really bad at the end of his life.” Same patterns went on, a bad comment followed a good comment: “get off the shelf, because you should be working in the finest restaurant in the world.” Starting at this point, I think the comedians exaggerated the situation to show the art of the word to the audience. A small funny point here is Peele’s reaction to this compliment, which is his saying “Thank you chief” with a supercilious look, which also, in my opinion, brings the exaggeration down to earth since that’s exactly one will do if being given too much ridiculous comments from others. These ingenious controls kind of cater the theme of contrasting as well as the primary fun-generating function. Back to the sketch, the chief continuous, “that’s not any world that I live in.” What’s funny is that the last thing the Key performed, “In conclusion, aiiiiii…” with a gesture of “just-so-so”, “it’s hard to tell its good or not”.
As far as I am concerned, what makes this sketch appealing is that, first of all, it could set off heated discussions from the audience. I see plenty of creative comments such as “This is terrible…terribly good!”, “[K]eeye and [P]eele sucks…and by sucks I mean they suck the sadness of my life.” By making this small piece of “praise or belittle” sitcom, the comedians successfully focused the attention of the audience onto the beauty of words, the art of expression and the source of humor. The same word can carry out totally different massages if being craftily facilitated, and everyone, not only the artists, but also the ordinary could make funs of the game of words. Another trick that endows the sketch popularity is that proper background music companied with the whole performance. This trick is common but crucial in exaggerating contrasts, therefore leading to stronger audience reflections.
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